Like greenlady2 says, your LJ, whine at will. :) But I know what you mean. I suppose it's inevitable that some stories aren't as wall-written as others, relatively speaking. Doesn't mean it's bad--as the ones who did comment obviously thought. :)

Of course, easy for me to tell you that, even as I'm having some second thoughts myself. :-P Not because of the recipient, who left a wonderful comment and even recced it. But I rushed at the end and I'd dearly love the opportunity for a do-over. *sigh* Maybe the recipient won't mind me taking another bite at the apple after the reveal, we'll see.